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Old 12-07-2018, 08:14 AM   #1
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X-Force Samples

Hello Guys this is my X-Force samples. I will send them to Marvel in a couple of days. Wanna hear your opinion first.











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Old 12-08-2018, 08:21 PM   #2
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i think you have a lot of potential and you clearly are working hard and getting better with every post you do. im looking forward to seeing how you progress.

with these pages, if I were to give my thoughts...

overall..while I can tell whats going on..(which is a big thing)..the action is really ...boring? for an xmen comic, especially with these characters, my first thought is big powerful action, especially if they are all fighting ninja whatevers. everyone just looks kinda bored and smiling and not really emoting any kind of power or intensity.

on page one..the splash...anatomical things pop up. size relations are all over the place. wolvie looks sized weird when compared to girl up front who looks smaller, but girl in back looks huge.
and..looking at is...psylockes left leg...im getting lost as to where it went/goes? and it looks small and weird..the thigh gap in her pelvis area is huge.... in fact..all her proportions in her hip area are odd. the composition of the placement of them could use some refining.

page 2 is okay...but that's the cutest sweetest looking wolverine ive ever seen. kinda want to hug him hes so pleasant seeming..even stabbing a guy.

page 3 deadpools feet are all whack. Psylocke again looks extremely proportionally weird... size relations are off on them all in varying ways I think...

page 4- psylockes anatomy proportions are way off there.. small legs/feet with a massive upper body head...

anyway...things like that. all things I struggle with all the time as well. we just keep going trying to get better.

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Thanks a lot. I think Im gonna rework them a bit before sending them to marvel. I already done 2 test pages for them and 2 samples still they keep asking for more samples lol. Its a tough work but its worth
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Great improvement. https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=hcK84FCSWM4 is a good video on anatomy.
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Old 12-09-2018, 12:29 PM   #5
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Thanks a lot. I think Im gonna rework them a bit before sending them to marvel. I already done 2 test pages for them and 2 samples still they keep asking for more samples lol. Its a tough work but its worth
How'd you get in touch with Marvel? that's awesome.
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Old 12-12-2018, 10:41 PM   #6
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I met CB on a portfolio review and he ask me to send him more art. Been sending them samples for almost a year

I think I will send these samples to them (minus the first one)

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I think I'm gonna ink this one guys. What do you think??
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Old 12-19-2018, 04:03 AM   #8
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Good work.

I will say that the biggest thing that caught my attention - something consistent throughout these particular samples - is a need to focus more on expressions and body language.

I didn't see a lot of emotion from the characters in this sample, from their facial expressions to their postures and even into their movements.

In comics, there is an incredible need to create dynamism in your characters. Movements even need to be exaggerated to jump off the page. When your characters don't express visually, it won't matter how exciting the dialogue is: it will come out as flat.

Keep at it.
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