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Old 06-07-2018, 12:58 PM   #1
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Some more sequential samples from new project

Here are a couple of pages from a new project I'm working on.
As always, critiques are very well accepted.
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three more from the same project!







Please give me some critiques! They'll be well apreciated
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Biggest issue for me is little things, like all the men are same height, body size and shape.
Some issues with perspective, for example 2nd last page, 2nd panel, two cars in front of containers are different size although containers seem same size, also one car seems to be on a slightly different plane, as its point downwards a little. However same shot in the last panel, you fix this issue. Also having a hard time following character placements to one another, which causes issues trying to follow the story.
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Biggest issue for me is little things, like all the men are same height, body size and shape.
Some issues with perspective, for example 2nd last page, 2nd panel, two cars in front of containers are different size although containers seem same size, also one car seems to be on a slightly different plane, as its point downwards a little. However same shot in the last panel, you fix this issue. Also having a hard time following character placements to one another, which causes issues trying to follow the story.
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Thanks a lot, yes, the cars do look strange now that you say it, and character sizes differentiation has not been something I looked into when drawing these pages. About character placing, what are the panels that look more off to you?
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You break the 180 degrees rule a few time with the characters switching quadrants in panels as the story progresses. I know most people in comics do not care about this rule but it would make reading so much smoother if you respected the rules.

Using the dock as the standard way to orient and understand the placement of the characters, the shadows are off and keep moving. The light source based on the first panel is about 100 degrees if the dock is at zero. Well the shadows on the characters and the ground keep moving from frame to frame thereafter.

There are issues with the way you play with the lens effects and perspectives but that could also be expressionism/stylistic so not much t say about that.

In terms of pacing, in the last page, I would have added an extra panel between the kill shot and the apartment dweller's opening the door to create a bit more anticipation and surprise. The kill shot is too fast and although supposed to be unexpected, it's pacing is still off for a maximum shock effect.

Don't worry too much about the cars. They are in the background and small details that won't really change much.
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