Shores and Sorcery

ward1976 · 01-10-2018, 01:19 PM

12013 · 01-10-2018, 07:58 PM

this is kinda neat. id like to see more.

I think the weird panel design isn't helping anything at all. those last 2 panels took me some time to figure out what I was seeing.

one thing to be aware of is like in panel 2, you have the top of that ..whatever it is..a creature I guess..? the top of that shell thing lined up perfectly with the horizon line in the distance and it just ruins the whole composition. it should be offset..with above the horizon line or below it.

the last panel is not bad, but the arrow is so small its kinda hard to see. but I think being small like that might be a good thing in a story telling way.. so I come back to the strange panel layout...if this box the drawing was in was more traditionally square, I think that it may help visually make everything more easy to see and understand.

show us more of this tho. its kinda cool.

rob

Scribbly · 01-11-2018, 10:41 PM

First panel OK. Neat.
Second panel, I cannot tell what is that. A caterpillar in a rooftop? Not sure.

sevans · 01-11-2018, 10:55 PM

There is three panels. Hard to read.

ward1976 · 01-19-2018, 11:19 AM

This was a failed attempt of combat on a rocking boat.

01-10-2018, 01:19 PM	#1
ward1976 Registered User Join Date: Aug 2013 Location: West Leyden Ny Posts: 198	Shores and Sorcery

01-10-2018, 07:58 PM	#2
12013 Rob Norton Join Date: Apr 2017 Location: utah Posts: 386	this is kinda neat. id like to see more. I think the weird panel design isn't helping anything at all. those last 2 panels took me some time to figure out what I was seeing. one thing to be aware of is like in panel 2, you have the top of that ..whatever it is..a creature I guess..? the top of that shell thing lined up perfectly with the horizon line in the distance and it just ruins the whole composition. it should be offset..with above the horizon line or below it. the last panel is not bad, but the arrow is so small its kinda hard to see. but I think being small like that might be a good thing in a story telling way.. so I come back to the strange panel layout...if this box the drawing was in was more traditionally square, I think that it may help visually make everything more easy to see and understand. show us more of this tho. its kinda cool. rob __________________ My art here...for anyone that wants to see.. https://robnor101.deviantart.com/gallery/

01-11-2018, 10:55 PM	#4
sevans www.sevans.co.nz Join Date: May 2004 Location: Nowheresville, New Zealand Posts: 6,001	There is three panels. Hard to read. __________________ Have a look at all my other work.... you won't regret it. Well you might, but do it anyway! https://sevans73.deviantart.com/gallery/ www.sevans.co.nz

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01-11-2018, 10:41 PM	#3
Scribbly Registered User Join Date: Oct 2006 Location: Wicked Salem, MA Posts: 4,911	First panel OK. Neat. Second panel, I cannot tell what is that. A caterpillar in a rooftop? Not sure.

01-19-2018, 11:19 AM	#5
ward1976 Registered User Join Date: Aug 2013 Location: West Leyden Ny Posts: 198	This was a failed attempt of combat on a rocking boat.