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Old 09-13-2017, 12:05 PM   #1
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Some Black and White samples

Hello everyone, these are some inked samples from a project with writer Mark Bertolini
I'd love to hear feedback and suggestions from all of you

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Old 09-13-2017, 12:40 PM   #2
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^ What's Stuart Immonen doing here at Digital Webbing?

Jokes aside; the art is clear, the action smooth, the characters recognizable, and the story laid out enough to get me curious. How'd the Cat end up like that?

Only suggestion I'd make is to ensure that the dates on the newspaper headings be clear enough to show that they're flashback.

(It does occur to me that the script/dialogue/narration could take care of this during lettering, in which case never mind).

Overall some really nice work.
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Thanks SStiger, that is some serious praise, I really appreciate it.

I see what you mean as regards the newspaper, in fact it is clearer in the colored version, which I will post very soon.
In addition, Mark will letter these pages, I'm sure they will be easier to understand.
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Old 09-13-2017, 03:42 PM   #4
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Had to move the cover due to image limit


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Old 09-16-2017, 09:54 AM   #5
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