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Old 10-09-2018, 01:48 PM   #1
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A single page story I did, critiques always welcome

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Old 10-18-2018, 01:56 PM   #2
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This is a very nice page. All worked with care.
I think could be better for the audience if you add the gutters, separating panels for a better and easy reading. Right now I cannot tell where a panel ends and where the next start.
At some point, maybe panel 3, the main character should be closer for better identification.
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I also like the page and the flow of movement is good. I just thought the sequences is tightly fit in one page and there's not any close up to the main character at all. I think this should be spread out into two pages at the most. Overall it's really good work.
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Thank you, I will work on those things. The single page was requirement for the art show it was sent into.
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