Spiderman's Confession - Page 2

MattTriano · 02-21-2012, 06:30 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by omarmesa

I'm a professional artist.I've been drawing before most of these guys were born.I didn't notice anything wrong with this until everyone else pointed it out.Food for thought.

I've seen you post elsewhere with similar advice, so as a cumulative question I'm wondering what message you're conveying; it's a curious thing, because in this post it seems as though you're saying one of two things. Either the group critique swayed your favor for the work in question to the negative, or it would seem the underlying theme is that only upon formally analyzing a work does it fall apart. I'm quite honestly confused by either of these ideas, and I don't see a third option.
Are you a cartoonist? Single panel or sequential, if yes? The reason I ask is because drawing long form comics in a clear, economic and entertaining way requires an incredible interdisciplinary base. It isn't enough to draw well, or compose images pleasingly, or understand perspectival space. Any and all by themselves are impressive, but telling the story you have in your head on paper so that anyone from ages 8 to 80 understands it is an extreme challenge.
Anyone asking for a critique on their sequential work, amatuer and pro alike, is asking for an audience with a voice; this should be applauded. Peer review is a wonderful thing, to get outside one's creative headspace and find new ways of looking at one's own work is a valid path to breakthrough. No one's opinion is gospel, nor should it be dismissed; this is the essence of subjectivity.
Those who post and request critique want their comics deconstructed; they want to improve their ability to communicate, which should be celebrated.
What do you think? I'm curious.
Cheers,
M

Kav · 02-28-2012, 04:35 PM

needs more black and more detailed backgrounds-look like coloring book pages!

V!K · 02-28-2012, 05:26 PM

The biggest issue I have with this is the lack of variation. 90% of the panels are medium shots and it makes the pages look pretty dull. It's tough to make a talking scene look interesting. Use close ups, vary the angles, tilt the horizon line, etc. Invent the scene.

Kav · 05-04-2012, 01:12 PM

that's for sure v!k-seeing panels like this makes me think the writer is too blame-too much expositional dialogue which is a plot killer.

Erick Cruz · 06-11-2012, 01:51 AM

Your art reminds me a lot of Josh Middleton's. Clean lines, not much variation in line weight, a colorists dream come true.

But, as mentioned before, despite everything done really well, you made the dreaded talking head scene boring. Move or tilt the camera around, change angles, play with the layout more whatever it takes to make a boring scene not boring.

Nico Leon · 06-11-2012, 12:57 PM

Thanks for the coments!! I'll work on that variations! I going to redo all the pages in the next monts. Thank you very much! your comments helped me see many things I had not seen before.

Erick Cruz: I had not heard of Josh Middleton before, I google it and now he is among my favorite artists! thank you very much!!

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02-28-2012, 04:35 PM	#17
Kav Registered User Join Date: Jan 2011 Location: Sacramento, Earth Posts: 87	needs more black and more detailed backgrounds-look like coloring book pages!

02-28-2012, 05:26 PM	#18
V!K vikillustration.com Join Date: Apr 2011 Location: Basel, Switzerland Posts: 120	The biggest issue I have with this is the lack of variation. 90% of the panels are medium shots and it makes the pages look pretty dull. It's tough to make a talking scene look interesting. Use close ups, vary the angles, tilt the horizon line, etc. Invent the scene.

05-04-2012, 01:12 PM	#19
Kav Registered User Join Date: Jan 2011 Location: Sacramento, Earth Posts: 87	that's for sure v!k-seeing panels like this makes me think the writer is too blame-too much expositional dialogue which is a plot killer.

06-11-2012, 01:51 AM	#20
Erick Cruz Starving Artist Join Date: Oct 2005 Location: Tijuana, Baja Calif, Mexico Posts: 389	Your art reminds me a lot of Josh Middleton's. Clean lines, not much variation in line weight, a colorists dream come true. But, as mentioned before, despite everything done really well, you made the dreaded talking head scene boring. Move or tilt the camera around, change angles, play with the layout more whatever it takes to make a boring scene not boring.

06-11-2012, 12:57 PM	#21
Nico Leon nico-leon.deviantart.com Join Date: Jan 2012 Posts: 30	Thanks for the coments!! I'll work on that variations! I going to redo all the pages in the next monts. Thank you very much! your comments helped me see many things I had not seen before. Erick Cruz: I had not heard of Josh Middleton before, I google it and now he is among my favorite artists! thank you very much!!