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03-13-2014, 09:12 AM
Hi, everyone!

My name is Chris and I have very recently turned my eye to creating comics. My favorite writers are the usual suspects; Alan Moore, Neil Gaiman, Warren Ellis, Garth Ennis, you know the crowd. I've always wanted to write for the medium so this January I decided to give it a go by getting in contact with my 'All-in-One' creative team of the fantastic Łukasz Marko and begin to write the story of Vynk.

Vynk is the story of an entity that has been alive since the first development of life on Earth. An entity that has always known the explanation for all things, who was endowed from the beginning of life with the answer to all the mysteries of the universe and beyond. As life evolved so did he, taking on the form of which ever creature was the best adapted and most intelligent that inhabited our world.

After 3.6 billion years, during the time of early human civilization, he begins to share his knowledge with us. After many cultures fail to understand his revelation, he finally shares his story with an inmate who has been imprisoned in the Parisian Bastille in 1787. To Vynk's shock and surprise the prisoner understands every word of the explanation. But the inmate has one question: 'What does it all mean?'

To this, Vynk is at a loss for words. In all the countless centuries of his life, after all the wonders he has seen and known about, he has never pondered such a notion.

It is after the Parisian inmate hangs himself that Vynk decides that this question is one that must be answered and the search for that answer takes him far away from our Earth, to the very edge of our reality and beyond into realms unknown.

Vynk is set in a universe which is a mesh between the scientific and mythological that creates a cosmos of far-reaching wonder and unfathomable cruelty.

Special credit to the artist:

Łukasz Marko is from Bydgoszcz in eastern Poland. He has worked on many indie comics before, as well as illustrating for video game manuals and is an all round top bloke.

Anyway, that's enough of that from me, here are the first 9 pages of my first comic; Vynk. Enjoy, and let me know what you think.


Written/Created by Chris Ruston
Illustrated/Inked/Coloured/Lettered by Łukasz Marko

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chris stevens
03-13-2014, 11:46 PM
there's a nice flow here storytelling-wise. i'll be honest and say i'm not into the subject matter, but the script and art work together and there's good flow panel to panel. the lettering, while the placements are fine, looks bad to my eyes. i'd redo it. solid ground to build on here.

03-22-2014, 11:07 PM
Thanks, man. I know the subject matter won't be to everyone taste but it is subject matter that I really enjoy writing.

I will look at redoing the lettering.