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TPG Week 212: Pause To Think




Welcome back, one and all, to another installment of the Proving Grounds! This week, we have a new Brave One in Fabian Andres. We also have Liam Hayes in blue, I'm the guy in red, and let's see what Fabian does in an

INFINITE ECHO #1

Before we begin, I have to say that I'm disappointed that I had to pick up the font size from 10 to 12. You're welcome.

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Panel 1: ALL-WIDE PANEL. We see a dark (What's the light source? Moonlight?) and lonely temperate forest from above. Maybe NIXXIE’s silhouette is barely visible. She’s running away from THE HUNTERS. (We're not going to be able to see any characters with this establishing shot. They'll be lost in a sea of detail. We don't need to see them, though. A good way to pull us in would be to have dialogue coming from the tree tops; perhaps from the hunters.)

1. CAPTION: Several years ago.

Panel 2: ALL-WIDE PANEL. NIXXIE runs through the forest. She’s desperate to escape but she knows she’s being followed. (This is prose. How is this visually represented? Do we see silhouettes of her pursuers in the background? Is she expressing fear? Think visually.) She’s wearing plain and slightly ragged clothing. (Modern clothing? Fantasy clothing? Elaborate.) Her face and ears remain unseen. (What's the shot for this panel. I know what I'd go with: the character running towards us with her pursuers in the background. That way we get the danger of the hunters and Nixxie's expression.)(Can't show an expression if you want to hide a face. Especially ears. The ears will give it away every time.)

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