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Old 01-24-2015, 07:20 PM   #4
SamRoads
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Thanks for doing this TPG Sam and Steven!

I'm unhappy with this story, and not really for the perfectly good reasons Sam and Steven poked holes in it.

This all feels like a 1980s video nasty where the basic point of the exercise is to see women die. Haven't we grown out of that?

And with those stories there was generally the idea of the protagonist having committed some kind of sin, for which they were punished by the evil killer. It was often having sex, it could be pride, greed, inquisitiveness. Sometimes just ignorance.

Not sure if this story even has that kind of nuance. It just seems to be:

A stranger invites a waitress on a bike ride, then kills her, because killing her is what the stranger does. The End.
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