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Old 11-10-2014, 09:19 PM   #2
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This was one of the first pages I did! It's been a while since I critiqued lettering work, but...

- "The creature is mine!" is left-aligned for some reason. That should not be.

- You have crossbar I's all over the place. Ow.

- I'm pretty sure "Ditto, Chica" is attached to the wrong guy's mouth in the last panel. At least, I remember that I had it coming from the same guy who says "Ditto" in tiny print. I may have been mistaken.

- Try to think of the way you break text into lines as having the goal of making a roughly plus-sign shape. For example,

You'll do
nothing but
my bidding after
I sup on
your genes!

might look better as

You'll do
nothing but my
bidding after I sup
on your
genes!

You do an excellent job of this in the "let's move the car over here" panel, actually.

- I feel like your balloons are a little too tight to the text overall

- Other than that, pretty decent work. I dig your sound effect!
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