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a) I'm pretty sure you can get those faces to look better. I guess you could just say that's the style, but if so, I don't think the style is that flattering, but that would just be my opinion.
b) I think it is ill advised to break panel with Hawkeye on the final page. There is already so much going on that you're just confusing things. I get the battle is hectic, but I believe clarity comes before anything else. As comic artists, what we should be trying to do above all else is communicate messages clearly to the reader. c) I don't think you established the settings strongly enough. Yeah, I can tell it's a sewer, but this could have been done better. On the first page, you have one small establishing shot, and then more or less forget about backgrounds and it's a bunch of talking heads. This may also be a problem with the script, if there is one. I don't know. d) I can't tell what is going on in the last panel. I see there are characters, but I don't know what they are doing. I just see bodies and heads.
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Did you follow a script written by someone else or is this something you came up with?
Your biggest weakness is figure drawing, but they aren't that bad at all, I would definetly suggest you practice anatomy a little more. I love your panel work, and this is your strength. I kind of agree with Neil, there is so much going on in the last page, its hard to tell what is going on, but I do love the Hawkeye breaking out, perhaps adjust the two panels around it, to suit that page.
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there is a lot of neat stuff going on here that I like. some refinement needed sure.. some clarity. but I like it. lots of energy and fun. details everywhere. keep sharing!
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