some pages of a story that Im working on

[mattvarmo]

Hi, this is the first comic that I've finished. is a 10 pag story, I made it to use it like a portafolio or something, would it work? what should I do instead?
I know that maybe I will have to put some building or a city location, in the second chapter the protagonist will explore a city or something.
The story is good, maybe is dumb, but because I'm better in drawing than writing. I took me 1 week to finish the art, but almost a month to came up with the story, script and that stuff.