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Old 02-17-2015, 03:57 AM   #1
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New spiderman pages

Hey Everyone! Here are the first 2 pages of some new spiderman samples. When I'm finished there will be 5 pages but I figured I'd upload these now to see how you all think they're coming along. Thanks for taking the time to look!
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Old 02-17-2015, 09:32 AM   #2
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Hello Mike! I think I think you need to train more your anatomy, proportion and perspective skills. Also, You need to use more reference for the buildings and cars. I like the narrative of page one, but page two, especialy from panel 1 to 2, the narative is confussing. I cant quite understand whats happening.

As a positive aspect, i like the balance of blacks and whites you are using.

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I see a lot of Ryan Stegman influence in these pages. I agree with lucardo. Your anatomy and perspective could use some work. Also, there are some inconsistencies with your storytelling, especially the flow from page one to page two. Just work on that and you should be fine.
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Your camera work has improved since before but your anatomy seems to have regressed (Spidey's head and neck particularly). It is a lot more expressive but less consistent. Also pg 1 panel 2 and 3 don't flow well. panel 2 he is high above buildings, panel 3 he is only on a streetlight. All in all good looking work, you'll be there in no time.
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