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Old 05-17-2015, 04:22 PM   #1
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Old 05-17-2015, 05:30 PM   #2
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Nicely done. Good shots, nice pacing. A lot of fakery and weightless figures hurt you, reference more. Sword hilt in fg on splash is unreferenced, why? It's the most important thing on the page. Weird panel borders aren't helping you, why not borderless vignettes in flashbacks, or something simpler? Are these raw scans or is this how you want the lineart to look in print?

Overall there's something here, but wonky faces and hands hurt you. Research everything.

Post more when you can, thanks for sharing these pages. Keep going.

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Old 05-17-2015, 06:10 PM   #3
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Nicely done. Good shots, nice pacing. A lot of fakery and weightless figures hurt you, reference more. Sword hilt in fg on splash is unreferenced, why? It's the most important thing on the page. Weird panel borders aren't helping you, why not borderless vignettes in flashbacks, or something simpler? Are these raw scans or is this how you want the lineart to look in print?

Overall there's something here, but wonky faces and hands hurt you. Research everything.

Post more when you can, thanks for sharing these pages. Keep going.

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i have to use more reference, my bad these are raw scans of a project with two classmates,I did not want to use panel borders in flashbacks, but my buddies have voted for that solution.
However I am glad that you follow and criticize my works,it gives me hope that i'm doing something good.
Thank you!
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Old 05-17-2015, 08:01 PM   #4
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Great panels, compositions and line work!
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Old 05-18-2015, 03:35 AM   #5
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Use more reference pictures, did you do thumbnails before? and I think needs some different weight in the lines.
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thank you for the advices, yes i've doing the thumbnails!
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