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Old 06-09-2015, 12:45 AM   #1
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A page, Critiques Welcome

This is a page I just finished up with, but would love some input, as I always like to see what I can improve upon in following pages



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Old 06-09-2015, 03:15 AM   #2
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Since your page is mainly head shots/faces.
This is what you need to concentrate on.
One area is the length of your noses... eg: from the nostrils to the eyebrows is too long.
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Old 06-09-2015, 11:16 AM   #3
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drawings are a bit rough. inking is rough.

backgrounds are kinda sketchy. you should add a little more detail to make them believable.

the perspective/layout on panel 4 is all weird. I thought it was 2 panels there. and it looks odd with the angles because its kinda straight on the kid, but then its like straight down on the thing the guy is holding. and its all to straight and angular. tilt the paper in the hand, have it in perspective coming towards the viewer or whatever. don't do just straight on boring shots.

storytelling is odd, and that little inset tiny panel doesn't really help anything being so odd sized and weirdly placed.

just some things to think about.

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IN real life, we almost never see things absolutely head on or in profile. Think about that.

You must use reference .... trace a picture of a face to get a feel for where the parts go.
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Thank you for the input, it has been invaluable
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but that's looking good! totally fun and yet in style. keep up with all great Art.
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Thank you paraquatz, I really appreciate it
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