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The below is VERY well said, and I recommend you heed these comments rather than continuing to post more pages that just prove the point.

Take a life-drawing class. Buy a Gray's Anatomy book (the artist's best friend -- it teaches you not only anatomy, but how muscles, tendons, and bones all work together).

You DEFINITELY have potential, but you have to take input and then apply it.

Also: Buy Will Eisner's Comics & Sequential Art & Marvel's old standard How to Draw the Marvel Way.

Much luck to you!

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a) I'm pretty sure you can get those faces to look better. I guess you could just say that's the style, but if so, I don't think the style is that flattering, but that would just be my opinion.

b) I think it is ill advised to break panel with Hawkeye on the final page. There is already so much going on that you're just confusing things. I get the battle is hectic, but I believe clarity comes before anything else. As comic artists, what we should be trying to do above all else is communicate messages clearly to the reader.

c) I don't think you established the settings strongly enough. Yeah, I can tell it's a sewer, but this could have been done better. On the first page, you have one small establishing shot, and then more or less forget about backgrounds and it's a bunch of talking heads. This may also be a problem with the script, if there is one. I don't know.

d) I can't tell what is going on in the last panel. I see there are characters, but I don't know what they are doing. I just see bodies and heads.
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