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Hey all,
I'm back with new samples! I really wanted to put focus on my storytelling with these. I noticed lots of writers want for more character driven pieces, so I also drove to highlight my skills in emotion and facial expression. Guy Gardener and Booster Gold provided the perfect canvas for this! I even gave Booster's droid Skeets some characterization in his action. My goal was to tighten up my storytelling by using everything on the page effectively. I'm also going to be posting pages much faster from now on! I am excited to get your feedback on them! ![]() ![]() ![]() I am looking for work as well, so if you'd like for me to draw your book please visit my portfolio to see more of my work and send me an email here: http://marqphillipsp3.daportfolio.com/ To see me drawing these pages, check out my Instagram here: https://www.instagram.com/marqphillipsp3/ And if you want to see pages as they are finished please visit my Facebook page here: https://www.facebook.com/Marqphillipsp3 Last edited by Marqphillipsp3; 10-26-2016 at 04:40 PM. |
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Please tell me your thoughts all!
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Hey!
Your expressions and proportions still need work. I don't buy a lot of the drawing, it looks like you're really trying to sell it though. I like what you're doing but in general it would be a good idea in your samples to reference each main figure with multiple pieces of ref. Each pair of hands, each face, each hairstyle or energy effect should be referenced in some way to ground your understanding of the thing in reality. Then you can do whatever you want with it to make the image work. 1.1 your Watchtower has a semicircular structure along midsection-left which has little cutouts due to the ellipses, through which Earth is visible in tiny shards of shapes; said that to say this, don't do that. Big shapes, overlap decisively. Clean choices. You must boldly organize the information for story and beauty, confident atmospheric perspective is always sexy. Rafael Albuquerque does it brilliantly. Mignola. I very much like 1.2, 1.3, 2.4, DPS.2, DPS.4, DPS.5. They're well constructed for the most part and are good drawings. But again, no double page spreads. Editors don't know if you're showing off or using it as a crutch. It feels like bullshit. Check out theartmodels.com and posespace.com/posetool for a wealth of multi-photo figure ref, 3dwarehouse.sketchup.com and sketchfab.com and pixelsquid.com for 3D models (only sketchup for download), 123rf.com/stock-footage for short video ref. Take photos of yourself and buy action figures/little cars/little weapons/one-sixth scale stuff from ebay and thrift stores. I think you can do better, because these are good and I think you have more in the tank. Thanks for posting these, it shows that you are committed to improving. You will. Takes time. Oh and lighting in DPS.1 is great. More of that, good solid research shit. Great plasma punch and asteroid-ie impact corona. Good work man. Keep going. Post more. Best, M
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Those websites were fantastic! Thanks again for the insight, i'm already hard at work on new samples. If you'd like to see them as they're done check out my links. Please keep it coming, the critique only helps me get better.
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The first issue I see is I would have drawn the first panel showing space smaller, to leave more room for the interior of the "lunch room." I get the jist of whats going on, a fight in the cafeteria scenario is being shown, but the details of what is happening, is very confusing to me.
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Hey guys, thanks sooo much for the critique it helped a TON! I have new pages out! Check em out here!
http://www.digitalwebbing.com/forums...08#post1864308 |
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