A page, Critiques Welcome

creativejoe83 · 06-09-2015, 12:45 AM

This is a page I just finished up with, but would love some input, as I always like to see what I can improve upon in following pages

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sevans · 06-09-2015, 03:15 AM

Since your page is mainly head shots/faces.
This is what you need to concentrate on.
One area is the length of your noses... eg: from the nostrils to the eyebrows is too long.

Rob Norton · 06-09-2015, 11:16 AM

drawings are a bit rough. inking is rough.

backgrounds are kinda sketchy. you should add a little more detail to make them believable.

the perspective/layout on panel 4 is all weird. I thought it was 2 panels there. and it looks odd with the angles because its kinda straight on the kid, but then its like straight down on the thing the guy is holding. and its all to straight and angular. tilt the paper in the hand, have it in perspective coming towards the viewer or whatever. don't do just straight on boring shots.

storytelling is odd, and that little inset tiny panel doesn't really help anything being so odd sized and weirdly placed.

just some things to think about.

rob

cesare2009 · 06-09-2015, 11:42 AM

IN real life, we almost never see things absolutely head on or in profile. Think about that.

You must use reference .... trace a picture of a face to get a feel for where the parts go.

creativejoe83 · 06-14-2015, 04:28 AM

Thank you for the input, it has been invaluable

paraquatz · 06-14-2015, 10:14 AM

but that's looking good! totally fun and yet in style. keep up with all great Art.

creativejoe83 · 07-08-2015, 03:26 AM

Thank you paraquatz, I really appreciate it

06-09-2015, 12:45 AM	#1
creativejoe83 Penciler/Inker/Letterer Join Date: Jun 2015 Location: Denver, Co Posts: 24	A page, Critiques Welcome This is a page I just finished up with, but would love some input, as I always like to see what I can improve upon in following pages [IMG][/IMG]

06-09-2015, 03:15 AM	#2
sevans www.artofevans.nz Join Date: May 2004 Location: Whangarei, New Zealand Posts: 6,601	Since your page is mainly head shots/faces. This is what you need to concentrate on. One area is the length of your noses... eg: from the nostrils to the eyebrows is too long. __________________ Have a look at all my other work.... you won't regret it. Well you might, but do it anyway! https://sevans73.deviantart.com/gallery/ www.artofevans.nz https://www.instagram.com/artofevans/

06-14-2015, 10:14 AM	#6
paraquatz Registered User Join Date: Feb 2014 Location: LakeElsinore Posts: 19	but that's looking good! totally fun and yet in style. keep up with all great Art. __________________ Dr.Genuks Illustration Artist, Penciller, Concept Artist, 3D sculptor, Storyboardist, Cover Art maker tweet to @genukz

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creativejoe83 Penciler/Inker/Letterer Join Date: Jun 2015 Location: Denver, Co Posts: 24	Thank you paraquatz, I really appreciate it __________________ Joseph Nathan Smith Comic Book Artist/Writer creativejoe83@gmail.com www.facebook.com/straypen www.instagram.com/creativejoe83

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06-09-2015, 11:16 AM	#3
Rob Norton apprentice of the pencil Join Date: Jul 2002 Location: utah Posts: 3,990	drawings are a bit rough. inking is rough. backgrounds are kinda sketchy. you should add a little more detail to make them believable. the perspective/layout on panel 4 is all weird. I thought it was 2 panels there. and it looks odd with the angles because its kinda straight on the kid, but then its like straight down on the thing the guy is holding. and its all to straight and angular. tilt the paper in the hand, have it in perspective coming towards the viewer or whatever. don't do just straight on boring shots. storytelling is odd, and that little inset tiny panel doesn't really help anything being so odd sized and weirdly placed. just some things to think about. rob

06-09-2015, 11:42 AM	#4
cesare2009 Blood Sweat and Tears Join Date: Apr 2009 Location: Montreal, Qc Posts: 716	IN real life, we almost never see things absolutely head on or in profile. Think about that. You must use reference .... trace a picture of a face to get a feel for where the parts go.

06-14-2015, 04:28 AM	#5
creativejoe83 Penciler/Inker/Letterer Join Date: Jun 2015 Location: Denver, Co Posts: 24	Thank you for the input, it has been invaluable