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Old 03-13-2014, 03:07 PM   #1
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Wrestling comic - HEEL

Any wrestling fans here? Well this was a pitch I was preparing to send to Image Comics... Still haven't mailed in the pitch... Now, just looking for any kind of feedback. Here is the 1st page of the 9 page pitch. What do you guys think? Let me know if you want to see the next one.

It's titled HEEL: 2 Faces of Damian Blane. It's something like The Wrestler meets Constantine.

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Old 03-24-2014, 02:38 PM   #2
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The art works, if you removed the text I could follow along. But, and many people suffer from this, way too many words. I didn't want to read the first box, and I didn't want to read everything the announcers had to say. One solution would be to break the two caption boxes into 4 in the first panel, 2 to the left, 2 to the right; then break those word balloons into 2 separate thoughts by each announcer. It gives the reader a visual break, feels less daunting.

Good luck!
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im a huge 90s-era njpw and lucharesu fan so i guess im your target audience.
anyway, everything looks really good.........except for panel 3. it doesnt look very clear at all that he is kicking out of the luchador's pinfall attempt.
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wow! I've been a Pro wrestling fan all my life' I love your panels' the last one with wrestling announcers is gold' on Panel 3 did you Draw from the Wrestling legend Antonio Inoki? it look's like a moved he dose
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Not many wrestling comics out! One of my early scripts was themed around luchadores, but I've seen only one other wrestling comic, first at cons, later in a Kickstarter campaign.

This looks great, really captures the energy and excitement of a match. Like the first person who responded, I think you've got too much text. It slows the action and takes attention from it at the same time.

Good luck with your Image pitch!
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Old 03-30-2014, 01:27 PM   #6
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Heel Page 2

Thanks for the comments, guys! I'm also a huge wrestling fan which fueled me to write Heel! Trying to pitch this for publication. If no dice, I'll release it as webcomic. If you guys dig zombies, check out my webcomic at undertheflesh.com.

Horrorcomics press, I drew from Luchalibre, WWE Attitude era, ECW, and Japanese wrestling. Although, I'm familiar with Inoki, but panel 3 was Blane kicking out of the pinfall from panel 1 ; )

Again, I appreciate the feedback. What do you guys think of page 2?
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Old 04-02-2014, 09:22 PM   #7
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Very nice work. Let's keep stuff like this in the Projects area.
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Thanks, Paul.
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Great work !
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Old 04-05-2014, 03:42 PM   #10
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Thanks, Ultrafan! Wrestling will always have a place! Just wish we had better offerings!
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