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Serenity and Chaos Issue One 'Chosen'

C+C please. I recommend listening to the following track while reading it: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=mzoNqdNwUQA





Serenity and Chaos
Issue One
“Chosen”
By Kevin Lee McDougall
www.kevinleemcdougall.deviantart.com
kevinleemcdougall@yahoo.com
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“There is a destiny that makes us brothers; none goes his way alone. All that we send into the lives of others comes back into our own.” - Edwin Markham
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SCENE ONE - Choral Village. Exterior. Day. Koral and Zade are embroiled in a toy fight. They’re young teens, both twelve. It’s a friendly event with a regular occurrence. They’re situated around the back of the temple, which is faced away from the village, away from prying eyes. The ground on which they’re fighting is hard and gritty and the weather is dull, cloudy, and raining. Above Koral and Zade, on the back of the temple is a vertical window featuring Revan, the first Vargan Royal.

I’m interested in the Edwin Markham quote above so much because its meaning is intertwined into almost everything that concerns the Koral and Zade relationship, while the mythology is the why. For example, the mythology is the destiny that makes them brothers.



PAGE 1 / 4 PANELS

PANEL ONE (row one): Wide. Close. Zade falls sideways to the ground, hitting it with force. It’s not completely clear what’s happening. A fuzzy effect may pronounce this, as well as add a sense of speed.

1. SFX: DHHSSHH!

PANEL TWO (row two): Large. Zoomed out. At the foreground, Zade is almost lying down, his rear to the ground. He’s just getting back up, using the palms of his hands to push his upper body up. His head is facing Koral, who’s standing behind Zade, in the background. looking happy with himself. He has the biggest smile on his face and is pointing his thumb to his chest.

2. KORAL: TWO-NIL TO ME!

PANEL THREE (row three): Long. Full figured. Zade is kneeling like a noble knight, one knee to the ground, one knee up. In Zade’s case left knee up, right knee down. There is however nothing noble about Zade at the moment. His anger has got the better of him; his face is turning as red as his hair and he’s concealing a clenched right fist behind his left leg. He’s about to burst.

3. ZADE: YOU WISH!

PANEL FOUR (row three): From behind Zade. He’s pounced up and has unleashed a ferocious right hook to the left side of Koral’s head.

4. SFX: KRAKK!



PAGE 2 / 6 PANELS

PANEL ONE (row one): Head and shoulder. Koral, covering the left side of his face with his right hand, as he shouts and frowns in fury.

5. KORAL: WHAT ARE YOU DOING, ZADE?!!

6. ZADE (off-panel): WINNING FOR ONCE, KORAL!!

PANEL TWO (row one): Head and shoulder. Koral, shocked frozen by what he’s seen, has pulled his hand somewhat away from his face, still in mid-air near the left side of his face, just not covering it, as if doing so somehow takes attention away from what Zade has just done. Koral for some reason is trying to make Zade feel better.

7. KORAL: Z-ZADE??

PANEL THREE (row two): Wide. Close. Zade has revealed his soul. Everything important that ever happened to him: having no father, his loving mother’s long illness, his grandparents bad treatment of him, It’s all there. His whole face has dropped in sadness. His eyes are drowning in tears, but he’s clenched his face trying to stop them from escaping. Behind and above Zade, to the left and right, to some extent, are the mythological temple window patterns. Off-panel someone shouts as they approach.

8. UNKNOWN: YOU!

PANEL FOUR (row three): Frontal. Medium. Zade’s grandmother approaches, face like thunder.

9. ZADE’S GRANDMA: YOU!!!

PANEL FIVE (row three): Zade’s left ear is being yanked by his grandma, his head tilting in the direction she’s puLling. Despite this, he’s showing no physical pain, and is paying no attention to her whatsoever. His glassy eyes are fixed on Koral. The only thing seen of grandma is her arm on the right side of the panel, yanking on that ear. It’s better if grandma’s face isn’t seen as it exemplifies Zade’s feeling to the audience.

10. ZADE’S GRANDMA: GET IN, NOW!!

PANEL SIX (row four): Wide. Diagonal. On the right, in the foreground, Zade’s grandma is still yanking on Zade’s ear as they make their way off-panel. On the left side, in the background, Koral, with a mark on the left side of his face, is standing at the side of the temple still watching Zade and his gran.

11. ZADE’S GRANDMA: FIGHTING?! AND YOU WONDER WHY YOUR MOTHER’S ILL!!



SCENE TWO - Alessia’s (Zade’s Mother’s) bedroom. Interior. Night. Zade sat at his dying mother’s bedside, in a small, dark room, that’s lit by only a few candles/lanterns. The room and its colours reflect a sense of warmth, but also give a chilling and menacing effect to later panels. Above and to the left of Zade is a curtained window.


PAGE 3 / 7 PANELS

PANEL ONE (row one): Close. The window, it views a spectacular night sky: two shooting stars, one that represents Serenity, and one for chaos, are at opposite ends, standing out in a sky littered with stars. This is important Craig, it’s tied into the mythological window patterns and the question Zade asks himself “why your mother’s ill?”.

12. CAPTION: “WHY YOUR MOTHER’S ILL?”

PANEL TWO (row one): Wide. Pull out. The upper part of the side of Alessia’s bed is in the foreground. Alessia herself is lying on her back, her pale head and arms sticking out of the covers. Zade is at the other side of the bed, watching over her. He’s slumped in a plain wooden chair looking at his mother. He’s tense, frowning, and his lower lip is sticking out. In the background, behind Zade is the curtained window. It’s not necessary for the entire window to be seen just needs to be acknowledged that it’s there.

PANEL THREE (row two): Small. Close. Diagonal. Alessia is just coming around. She’s frowned in pain as she’s awakened, and her eyes have fluttered in an attempt to open. Her face is pure white, withdrawn, and she has dark circles under her eyes.

13. ZADE (off-panel): M-MOM?!?

14. ALESSIA: Z… ZADE??

PANEL FOUR (row two): Wide. Zade and his mother are now being viewed from near the bottom end of the bed. The angle is slightly over them so that Alessia can be seen. Zade’s leaning over, holding her hand while she looks at him. He’s smiling bravely. She doesn’t look good.


15. ZADE: MOM.

16. ALESSIA: OH ZADE…MY…BEAUTIFUL SON. I…I-I’M SORRY. I’M SO…SO…

PANEL FIVE (row three): Small. Close. Alessia is slipping away. Her face is tense and full of creases as she tries to cope with the pain. Her eyes, which are half closed, are full of tears.

17.ZADE (off-panel): MOM?!

18. ALESSIA: SORRY…

PANEL SIX (row three): Small. Close. Alessia is finally free from her pain, she’s passed away. Her face is now unstressed and shows no emotion, though tears have dropped from her eyes and are now rolling down her cheeks.

18. ZADE (off-panel): MOM?!!

PANEL SEVEN (row four): Wide panel. Head and shoulder of Zade. Tears are strolling down his face, but he appears more threatening than he does sad. His head is slightly hung, with his eyes menacingly looking up. His nostrils have flared and his jaw has shook. The light from candles/lanterns bounces off of him, making him appear even more sinister.



SCENE THREE - Koral’s Bedroom, the morning after. a bruised faced Koral is lost in thought over the events of the previous day, while through a wide window, outside, on a small hilltop in the sunshine, Alessia’s funeral takes place. Koral’s room is unlike your typical teenagers, there are no posters, photos, and obviously no electrical equipment. The room is light and air, pretty much the complete opposite to Alessia’s room.


PAGE 4 / 6 PANELS

PANEL ONE (row one): Wide. Large. In the foreground, Koral standing by the window at the back of his room. He’s motionless and contemplative as he stares out of the window, through which Alessia’s funeral is taking place on a far off small hilltop. Alessia’s gravestone is on the left side of the panel, from the side. In front of it, stretching to the right, are about five blacked out figures. Zade, the only child there, is closest to the gravestone. There are another few blacked out figures that have made their way away from the funeral, and are at different stages on their way down the hill.

19. UNKNOWN: KORAL?

PANEL TWO (row two): Head and shoulder of Koral. He’s turned his head to the left side, the bruised side of his face, in reaction to someone off-panel who has entered the room and called his name.

20. KORAL: DAD?

PANEL THREE (row two): Medium. Koral’s dad Klein has entered the room. He’s standing in the doorway, looking stern as he questions Koral.

21. KLEIN: DON’T YOU THINK YOU SHOULD GO AND SEE HIM?

PANEL FOUR (row three): Medium. Diagonal. Koral’s head is hung low, his face full of shadows. His bruising is prominent.The darkness from within him is showing outwards.

22. KLEIN (off-panel): WELL?!

23. KORAL: IT…FEELS AKWARD.

24. KLEIN (Off-panel): SON…

PANEL FIVE (row four): Wide. Exterior. Through the windows, Klein consoles Koral, both of his arms on his shoulders. Koral’s head, still hung low, feeling the bruise on his face.

25. KLEIN: BEING A LEADER ALL ABOUT INTEGRITY. IF YOU HOPE TO ONE DAY LEAD THE VILLAGE, YOU’LL HAVE TO BE STRONGER THAN THIS. GO AND SEE HIM.



SCENE FOUR - Small Hilltop basking in sunshine. Exterior. Zade by his mother’s gravestone.


PAGE 5 / 8 PANELS

PANEL ONE (row one): Wide. Zoomed out. Diagonal. Zade at right of panel, standing alone by his mother’s gravestone.

PANEL TWO (row one): Small. From behind Zade. The back of his torso. A young hand embraces his lower back.

PANEL THREE (row two): Medium. The hand was Koral’s, and he’s now standing to the side of Zade, his head turned to face him. Zade’s gaze however is lost in the gravestone.

26. KORAL: Y-YOU OKAY?

PANEL FOUR (row two): Small. Close. Zade has turned his head slightly to face Koral, who is off-panel. He smirks, and despite having glassy eyes is upbeat.

27. ZADE: HI, KORAL.

PANEL FIVE (row two): Small. Close. Zade has turned his head away from Koral and is staring at the ground. He’s sorrowful.

28. ZADE: I’M SORRY…

PANEL SIX (row three): Small. Close. Koral, open smile, sporting his bruise.

29. ZADE: …ABOUT THAT.

30. KORAL: IT’S OKAY.

PANEL SEVEN (row four): Wide. Zoomed out. Koral and Zade standing side by side, behind Alessia’s gravestone.

31. ZADE: SO…

PANEL EIGHT (row four): Small. Close. Zade smiles mischievously.

32. ZADE: … IT’S TWO-NIL TO YOU, EH?



SCENE FIVE - Outside of Choral Village. Exterior. The sun has begun to set. Now twenty year olds, Koral and Zade are lost in another friendly fight, this time with swords. The surroundings are beautiful: a green meadow broken up by a pond stretches into the distance and next to Koral and Zade is a spreading oak tree. On the ground near Koral and Zade lie stringed sheaths.


PAGE 6 / 5 PANELS

PANEL ONE (row one): Wide. Establishing. Koral on the left, Zade on the right, squaring off with swords in hand, spreading oak tree to the left of Koral, and pond in the background. The sun is shining down on them. Zade holds his sword in front of him, two hands grasped on the helm, ready for battle. Koral has one hand on the helm, with his sword upside down, pointing downwards towards the ground, balancing on it almost.

33. CAPTION: EIGHT YEARS LATER…

34. ZADE: NOW WEARY FROM BATTLE, THE TWO MIGHTY WARRIORS SQUARE OFF ONCE MORE.

PANEL TWO (row two): Medium. Side. Having moved, Koral and Zade are now closer to one another. Swords held in same or similar way to panel one.

35. ZADE: …READY TO CARRY ON THEIR BITTER FIGHT TO THE BLOODY END.

36. KORAL: YOU KNOW, WE SHOULDN’T BE DOING THIS. MY DAD’LL GO CRAZY IF WE HURT OURSELVES

PANEL THREE (row two): Close. Small. Zade frowning, sarcastically serious.

37. ZADE: HEY, DON’T BREAK WITH THE ROLE-PLAY.

PANEL FOUR (row three): Medium. Koral has his sword held out, pronouncing it, staring at it. Zade holds his sword helm with one hand and the sharp blade our in the other palm, while looking at Koral.

38. KORAL: I’M SERIOUS, WE SHOULDN’T HAVE SNUCK THESE OUT.

39. ZADE: IT’S ABOUT TIME WE GOT OUR HANDS ON SOME REAL WEAPONRY. BESIDES, WE’VE GOT TO PASS THE TIME IN THE LAME ASS VILLAGE SOMEHOW.

40. KORAL: YOU STILL FIND IT BORING, AFTER ALL THIS TIME?

PANEL FIVE (row three): Medium. Koral and Zade are now lost in combat. Their swords are locked.

41. ZADE: NOT AS BORING AS YOU.

42. KORAL: I HOPE YOU’RE BACK IN ROLE-PLAY?

43. ZADE: AND WHAT IF I’M NOT.

44. KORAL: WELL THEN, I SUPPOSE I’LL JUST HAVE TO DEFEAT YOU.


PAGE 7 / 5 PANELS

PANEL ONE (row one): Medium. Zade has circled around, 360 degrees, and has thrust his sword against Koral’s neck. Koral holds his sword by his thigh, pointing outwards.

45. ZADE: DO YOU SURRENDER?

PANEL TWO (row one): Small. Long. Close. Koral’s hand as he lets go of his sword, which is on the way to the ground.

PANEL THREE (row two): Full figured. Zoomed out. Koral, halfway through a back-flip, has pushed Zades sword back towards him with his foot. Zade is stumbling backwards.

PANEL FOUR (row three): Full figured. Koral, crouched over, is just picking up his sword, getting ready for action.

46. KORAL: NEVER!

PANEL FIVE (row three): Medium. Zade, quickly and with force, has whacked his sword against Koral’s, who’s holding his sword against himself diagonally, as an act of defence. Koral is being knocked backwards in his crouch, with one of his hands held against the ground, just keeping him up.

47. ZADE: TOO SLOW!

48. KORAL: BE CAREFUL, ZADE.


PAGE 8 / 4 PANELS



PANEL ONE (row one): Wide. Large. Koral lies flat on the ground, his sword next to him. Zade has walked backwards past him, to the left, near the spreading oak tree, and has his left arm raised in the air, celebrating, holding his sword in his other hand next to his thigh, pointing outwards.

49. ZADE: AND THE PEOPLES CHAMPION WINS YET AGAIN.

PANEL TWO (row row): Small. Close. Zade’s foot has stepped backwards into a rock, in the grass.

PANEL THREE (row two): Zade has slammed backwards into the oak tree, hitting his head on it.

PANEL FOUR (row three): Long. A beehive has fallen out of the tree, and has hit Zade on the head, who is slumped on the ground against the tree.

50. ZADE: ARGHH!


PAGE 9 / 5 PANELS

PANEL ONE (row one): Being chased by bees, Zade has ran towards the pond. Koral, sat on the ground, looks on, his head facing Zade, laughing.

51. ZADE: AARRGGHHH!

52. KORAL: HAHAHAHA

PANEL TWO (row two): Zade has jumped into the pond. His head and shoulders are sticking out of the water. His usually spiked hair is lying flat, drenched with water. The bees are encircling him.

PANEL THREE (row two) Small. Close. Frontal. Koral laughing, heartily.

53. KORAL: HAHAHAHAHA

PANEL FOUR (row three): Zade, sporting bee stings on his face, is floating at edge of the pond, facing Koral (off-panel), arms stretched out in front of him, onto the grass.

54. ZADE: I GUESS THE BEES WON THIS ONE.

PANEL FIVE (row three): Small. Close. Bee stung Zade looking slightly up, lets out a worried look.

55. ZADE: KORAL… THE VILLAGE.


PAGE 10 / 3 PANELS


PANEL ONE (row one): Wide. Large. Angle tilted upwards. From behind, in the foreground, Zade bent over, is getting out of the pond and is dripping wet. He’s looking upwards. In front of him, in the background, Koral has turned his body to face behind him, and is also looking upwards. Up above them, in the sky beyond a mountain, are clouds of smoke.

PANEL TWO (row two): Wide. Thin. Close. Koral, shocked.

PANEL THREE (row three): Large. Full figured. Koral and Zade have picked up their stringed sheaths and are standing up. Zade, who is still dripping wet, is in the process of sheathing his sword: he’s holding the handle on the sword, and has sheathed it halfway in. Koral, who is at the front, with stringed sheath on his back, has moved forward, ready for action.


SCENE SIX - Sunset. Exterior. Mountain Path. Koral and Zade, stringed sheathed swords on their backs, walk up the mountain path towards Choral Village.


PAGE 11 / 4 PANELS

PANEL ONE (row one): Medium. Diagonal. From behind Koral and Zade as they journey up the mountain path. Two paths lie before them.

56. ZADE: WHAT DO YOU THINK COULD HAVE HAPPENED?

57. KORAL: I DON’T KNOW… IT’S NOT GOOD.

PANEL TWO (row two): Koral, crouched over, checking the ground, while Zade stands next to him. There are hoof tracks on the path and trodden flowers and grass at both sides of them.

58. KORAL: TRACKS… YOU HAPPY ABOUT THE “LAME ASS” VILLAGE NOW.

59. ZADE: I’M SORRY, KORAL, I-I DIDN’T MEAN ANYTHING BY IT.

60. KORAL: QUICK! LET’S GO.

PANEL 3 (row three): Full figured. Koral and Zade running up the mountain pathway.

PANEL 4 (row four): Medium. Koral and Zade, faces dropped, the reflection of fire in their eyes as they look on in utter shock.

61. KORAL: Oh no…
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SCENE 7- Choral Village. Night. Exterior. The village gates have been crushed by a large boulder. A catapult stands by the gates. Beyond the gates, some of the village is on fire and there are villagers being killed by Galacian soldiers.

PAGE 12 / FULL PAGER

FULL PAGER: From Koral and Zade’s POV as they look on at a war torn Choral Village.


PAGE 13 / 5 PANELS

PANEL ONE (row one): Frontal. Wide. Slightly overhead. Koral and Zade have walked into the village. Koral has his arm out signalling Zade to do something.

62. KORAL: GO CHECK ON YOUR GRANDPARENTS. I’LL GO CHECK ON MY MUM AND DAD.

63. ZADE: SHOULDN’T WE STICK TOGETHER?

64. KORAL: GO!

PANEL TWO (row two): Full figured. Diagonal. Zoomed out. From behind Koral and Zade. Koral is running off. Zade is shouting after him.

65. ZADE: KORAL?!

SCENE 8 - Night. Exterior. Klein Household. Koral walks up a pathway that leads to the Klein household. There are a few bodies littered across the path. There is a lawn outside the Klein household, on which lies Klein himself, injured.

PANEL THREE (row two): Over the shoulder. Koral walks up a path littered with bodies. At the end of the path sits the Klein household.

66. KORAL: MOM… DAD?

PANEL FOUR (row three): Koral has moved closer to the household. On the lawn outside it he’s noticed Klein, lithing, moaning in pain.

67. KLEIN: GAAHHH

68.KORAL: DAD!!

PANEL FIVE (row four): Koral holds Klein’s head and shoulders up.

69. KORAL: DAD!! ARE YOU OKAY? WHAT’S HAPPENED?!

70. KLEIN: ATTACKED… BY GALACIA. SOLDIERS FROM THE WEST.

71. KORAL: WHERE’S MUM.


PAGE 14 / 4 PANELS


PANEL ONE (row one): Klein in the foreground, with his arm stretched out, pointing it towards the house, in the background.

72. KLEIN: INSIDE… D-DON’T LOOK

PANEL TWO (row two): Small. Close. Koral looking on in exasperation.

73. KORAL: MUM?! NO …

PANEL THREE (row two): Wide. On the left, in the foreground, Koral holds his father in his arms. On the right, in the background, a Galacian soldier approaches, blooded sword in hand, ready to strike.

74. KLEIN: KORAL.. Y-YOU HAVE TO LEAVE!

75. KORAL: I’M NOT LEAVING YOU!

PANEL FOUR (row three): From behind the Galacian soldier as he holds his sword in the air with both hands, ready to strike down on Koral, also from behind.

76. GALACIAN SOLDIER: OH YES YOU ARE!


PAGE 15 / 3 PANELS

PANEL ONE (row one): Large. Full figured. Zade has arrived on scene just quick enough to save Koral’s life. He’s using his shoulder to barge the Galacian soldier out of the way/

PANEL TWO (row two): Close. Koral has turned his head to look behind him.

77. KORAL: ZADE!

PANEL THREE (row two): In the foreground, Koral is holding Klein, while looking towards Zade. Klein is looking Zade’s way also, who in the background has thrust his sword through the Galacian soldier.

78. KORAL: ZADE… NO!!

77. KLEIN: HE HAS TO, KORAL. TO SAVE YOU.


PAGE 16 / 6 PANELS


PANEL ONE (row one): Medium. Zade has walked over to Koral and Klein, and checks on Klein’s status. Klein has his head turned towards Zade.

78. KLEIN: THANK YOU, ZADE.

79. ZADE: HOW IS HE?

80. KLEIN: I-I’M FINE. HELP ME UP PLEASE.

PANEL TWO (row one): Medium. Koral and Zade have helped Klein up into a sitting position. They have one hand on him each, at both sides of him.

81. KLEIN: GET KORAL TO THE TEMPLE. THERE’S A SECRET WAY OUT THERE, IN THE EVENT THAT SOMETHING LIKE THIS MIGHT HAPPEN.

PANEL THREE (row two): Wide. Thin. Klein holds a key out in the palm of his hand.

82. KLEIN: HERE… Y-YOU BOTH HAVE TO LEAVE ME.

83. KORAL: DAD… NO!

84. KLEIN: TAKE KORAL, ZADE.

PANEL FOUR (row three): Medium. Zade, with one arm around Koral, pulling him back. Koral is resisting, crying.

85. KORAL: NO!!

86. ZADE: WE HAVE TO!

PANEL FIVE (row three): Zade, now with both arms around Koral, dragging him away. Koral is crying with his arm stretched out.

87. KORAL: DAD!!

PANEL SIX (row four): Wide. Full figured. Zoomed out. Koral and Zade now somewhat away from Klein. Zade running, holding Koral’s arm who’s trailing, looking back at his father, off-panel. There are a few dead bodies on the ground around them.


PAGE 17 / 5 PANELS

PANEL ONE (row one):Wide. Thin. Silhouette of three soldiers, two following one at the front, a General called Folgien. One at either side of him. To the far left and far right, the village is ablaze.

PANEL TWO (row two): Wide. Diagonal. Folgien holds his arm out instructing the other two soldiers to pursue Koral and Zade. The two soldiers are in front of Folgien, in pursuit.

88. FOLGIEN: GET AFTER THEM!

89. KLEIN (off-panel): NO!

PANEL THREE (row three): Medium. Klein sat on the lawn, holding arm over wounded stomach.

90. KLEIN: YOU BETTER… YOU BETTER NOT CATCH THEM.

PANEL FOUR (row four): Long. Klein from the side, looking to Folgien, who from the side too, is standing over him, looking down at him.

91. FOLGIEN: OH, I ALWAYS CATCH MY PREY!

92. KLEIN: HE’S MY SON!

PANEL FIVE (row four): Folgien has struck his sword into the back of Klein, downwards through his chest.



PAGE 18 / 6 PANELS


PANEL ONE (row one): Long. Klein from the front, in the foreground, blood seeping through his clothes from his chest. Folgien behind him, having just drawn his sword out, with his foot on the back of Klein.

93. FOLGIEN: THE NAME’S FOLGIEN BY THE WAY. I THINK EVERYONE SHOULD KNOW THEIR KILLER’S NAME.

PANEL TWO (row one): Close. Klein’s eyes have turned pure white, and blood is coming from his mouth.

PANEL THREE (row two): Closer. Pure white eyes.

PANEL FOUR (row two): Zoom out. Close. Koral, ragged and rough, with pure white eyes.

PANEL FIVE (rows three and four): Long. Diagonal. Koral’s back being whipped by a Luxa pirate. Blood seeping through his attire.

PANEL SIX (row four): Close. Koral, pure white eyes, blood coming from his mouth.



PAGE 19 / 3 PANELS


PANEL ONE (row one): Wide. Thin. Closer. Pure white eyes.

PANEL TWO (row two): Wide. Zoom out. Close. Klein again now, still with pure white eyes. Still with blood coming from the mouth, arm held out to the sky, a look of worry on Klein’s face.

94. KLEIN: KORAL… NO…

PANEL THREE (row three): Large. Zoom out. Overhead. Klein lied down. Still. Dead. Back to normal eyes now vacant. Folgien stands over Klein.

95. FOLGIEN: DEAD ALREADY…


SCENE 9 - Choral Village. Temple. Exterior. Koral and Zade are running, climbing the steps to the village temple. There are two stained glass windows, one on either side of the main doors. The window on the left depicts night time with a moon and stars, with red flaming eyes at the top of the window. The window on the right depicts day time with a sun, with blue flaming eyes at the top of the window.

PAGE 20 / 6 PANELS

PANEL ONE: SMALL. ZOOMED OUT. Koral and Zade on the run from Galacian soldiers (off-panel), running up the steps leading to the village temple.

PANEL TWO: Wide. Large. Behind Koral and Zade atop the steps and at the door to the village temple. Each one of the main doors is held open. Zade on the left, Koral on the right.


SCENE 10 - Temple. Interior. The patterned windows are prominent again from the inside, and are in correspondence with Koral and Zade’s position, i.e now reversed: the window now on the left of us depicts day time with a sun with blue flaming eyes at the top, while the window now on the right depicts night time, with a moon and stars, with red flaming eyes at the top. There are wooden benches leading to an alter, which has a reading pedestal, and at the back and centre of the alter, is a large statue of Revan, the first Vargan Royal, who has white hair and eyes, and is attired in holy-like clothing.

PANEL THREE: Wide. Koral and Zade are both quarter turned, and with their arm, have pushed a door closed each at the same time, Koral’s left arm and Zade’s right arm.

PANEL FOUR: Medium. From behind Koral and Zade as they hold a temple bench, and are barricading the now closed main doors with it. They’re both talking as they do it.

96. KORAL: WHAT… WHAT HAPPENED TO YOUR GRANDPARENTS, ZADE?

97. ZADE: NOT GOOD…

PANEL FIVE: Small. Close on Zade. Sad.

98. KORAL (off-panel): I’M SORRY.

99. ZADE: I’M SORRY TOO.

PANEL SIX. Medium. Zoomed out. From behind Koral and Zade, who, now away from the doors, walk side by side down the temple aisle towards the alter.

100. KORAL: COME ON. LET’S FIND THAT EXIT.


SCENE 11 - Temple. Exterior.

PAGE 21 / 5 PANELS

PANEL ONE: Medium. Frontal. View from the top of steps leading to the village temple. The two soldiers that Folgien sent after Koral and Zade, have made their way to the bottom of the steps leading to the village temple, both with swords held out in front of them.

PANEL TWO:Medium. Side. Diagonal. The two soldiers are now at the temple doors, barging into them.


SCENE 12 - Temple. Interior.

PANEL THREE: Medium. From behind Koral and Zade, who, at the back of the temple, have turned around to the temple doors, worried. The aisle and doors in view, between the middle of Koral and Zade.

101. KORAL: OH, NO!

PANEL FOUR: Medium. Front of Koral and Zade. They’ve drawn their swords, ready for action, with frowned faces and clenched teeth.


SCENE 13 - Temple. Exterior AND some interior,

PANEL FIVE: Wide. From behind the soldiers. They’ve barged into the doors again, which are now open just down the middle. Some of the temple can be seen, but not Koral and Zade.


SCENE 14 - Temple. Interior.


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PANEL ONE: Zoomed out. Full figured. The two soldiers stand in an empty temple midway up the aisle, with no sign of Koral and Zade. One of the soldiers is pointing to the alter. The statue of Revan is now split in two down the middle, vertically, and reveals a small, dark secret room with an open exit door.

PANEL TWO: Medium. From behind the two soldiers. The two soldiers have walked beyond the statue into the secret room. They book look beyond the open door.

PANEL THREE: POV from the two soldiers. Koral and Zade can be seen in the distance, running up a mountain path. Koral has a bag on his shoulder and is holding a letter in his hand.

PANEL FOUR: Medium. Koral and Zade running up the mountain. Koral holds a note out in his hand, and is looking back at the temple.

102. KORAL: DAD…

PANEL FIVE: Close on Koral’s Arm. He’s just dropped the note, and it is on its way to the ground.

PANEL SIX: Close up on the note. Some of the rocky ground can be seen around the outskirts of the note. The note says the following:

103. NOTE: TO KORAL, I HOPE THAT WE’VE PREPARED YOU IN THE EVENT OF THIS MOMENT HAPPENING. I SHELTERED YOU FROM THE WORLD AND KEPT YOU IN THE DARK ABOUT IT FOR A REASON. IT IS BRUTAL OUT THERE, AND I’M SO SORRY YOU’LL HAVE TO FIND OUT JUST HOW BRUTAL IT IS. IN THE BAG YOU WILL FIND EVERYTHING YOU NEED TO KNOW ABOUT OUR WORLD. WE WISH YOU THE VERY BEST, ALWAYS. WE LOVE YOU SON.


SCENE 15 - Galacian Headquarters. Night. A tower spires into the sky. Inside at the top is Vero, sat on his throne, white glowing eyes, free white long hair, and loose holy clothing. The top floor with the exceptions of the throne and numerous bookcases filled with books, is mostly empty and airy; it’s used mostly for mediation. There are two large glass doors that lead onto a balcony overlooking Galacia.

PAGE 23 / 5 PANELS

PANEL ONE: Establishing. Exterior. Galacian HQ.

103. CAPTION: GALACIA

PANEL TWO: Close. Small. A pair of beaming white eyes.

PANEL THREE: Zoomed out. Medium. In the background, Vero sat on the throne, a silhouette of Treben in the foreground.

104. TREBEN: VERO…

105. VERO: YES, TREBEN.

106. TREBEN: FOLGIEN FOLLOWED THROUGH. THE SETTLEMENT HAS BEEN TAKEN CARE OF.

PANEL FOUR: Medium. Vero sat slightly forward on the throne, with his arm out, his elbow on the arm of the throne, his hand facing upwards, his palm facing himself.

106. VERO: AND THE TWO YOUNG MEN?

PANEL FIVE: Wide. Large. Side. Treben, who is in full battle armour, has kneeled before Vero, his head down. Vero speaks his words with power and meaning, he’s leaned back on the throne completely.

107. TREBEN: THEY ARE ON THE RUN.

108.VERO: THEN THE JOURNEY HAS BEGUN!
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