3 Sample Pages - Spider-Man (Sam Raimi 2nd movie scene)

[Cubo]

Hello All.

Been a long time since I ever posted here.
I have been working hard to get samples to showcase.
Hope you guys like it and glad to hear (read) what you think.








Cubo

[12013]

these are pretty dang neat. the figures look great. the storytelling reads clear enough to be. composition works.

the backgrounds, while it seems in perspective correctly, as missing those elements that make it feel real and correct.. and..real world. right now..so much of it just looks like lines ruled out and some basic details added.
i should add...i fully admit this is the HARDEST thing to do...tho it seems simple. its my biggest deficiency.

panel one needs more grit. more detail. i would suggest losing the people all together or adding much more. just these 3 evenly spaces arbitrarily placed figures looks... faked for lack of a better work. and that car in panel 1 looks awful. completely faked and would be better if it werent there.

panel 2 is better, but still feels like it needs more real world detail. those back grounds need...light fixtures and wall sockets and ..wall decorations...aging or something...

the rest of the page looks great..tho id maybe suggest adding detail in teh last panel to indicate that the cars outside and they are still inside.. right now it looks kinda ambiguous...tho it IS obviously set up in previous panels.

page 2 is mostly fantastic... but maybe add details to the underside of that car. just help sell it rather than look like bland flat shapes.
the backgrounds, while again in proper perspective..just still look like a bunch of square boxy shapes.. they need detail. especially in a big grand shot like that.

page 3 i honestly dont have any problems with page 3.

overall pretty bad ass.

[Cubo]

Thank you @12013 !
Thank you for reviewing these pages and take the time to comment.
Those are really good comments and good critique.
After I´ve read your comments, I thought about what you state, and I agree with you. I could definitely add more elements to bring more life and elements to the backgrounds.

Thanks a lot!!

[bedtime143]

Hey Cubo, i think these pages are good. Your anatomy is a little stiff in places and the buildings could use some work but the more you draw these types of scenes the better you will get.
One thing is that i would spot more black areas in the panels, this will help to direct the reader. Also try to add some more foreshortening to the action scenes. This will make them look more interesting. I did some layouts for an example

[Cubo]

Thank you @bedtime143 !!!
Very interesting comments you have made. I liked a lot the layouts you made. Its quite interesting to see, how different, but how much "alive" the pages could become with some improvements.
Thank you for taking the time to review these pages